Inverted pyramid and writing structures.

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Leads:

  1. Three good leads include, how lead, why lead, and what lead. 
    1. How lead: begins with the how of the story 
    2. Why lead: begins with the cause of the story. 
    3. What lead: begins with the fact of the story.
  2. These leads are better because they are used often more than the 3 other leads (Who, when, where). 
Direct quotes:
  1. A direct quote creates a transition between paragraphs.
  2. A direct quote links the paragraph before the previous one and elaborates on it. 
  3. Because of an anonymous $25,000 donation, students who ride a school bus to and from school will have access to the Internet during their commute starting March 1.
  4. An attribution is what is put after the first sentence of a quote. 
  5. An attribution is in the form of noun then verb. 
  6.  Senior Bob Rodriguez said.
Transitions
  1. Transitions are what keep the story together and links paragraphs together. 
  2. Lead, direct quote, fact transition. 
Conclusion: 
  1. Are the most important and recent facts first? 
  2. Is the story accurate? Are the sources identified fully? 
  3. Are the paragraphs short? 
  4.   Is the sentence structure varied in the story?
  5.  Is the story neat and double-spaced so that it is easy to read? 
  6. Does your story flow? Did you use the transition/ quote formula? 
  7.  Did you use active voice?
  1. Paragraphs too long 
  2. Misspelling names in the story 
  3. Trying to use all of the information
What went wrong:

This school has 22 reported on campus fights during the 2010-2011 school year. And just last year alone the school had 18 fights. “Students have to learn how to solve life’s problems without violence, and this program will teach our students just that,” said Mr. Brown. In response to the fights the school district hired the Teen Conflict Resolution Team to help students solve disagreements through non-violent solutions.  Mr. Brown says “Now students will get suspended and be forced to attend this program,”  This action was put into place and after March 23, any student caught fighting on campus must complete a TCRT non-violence workshop, in addition to normal disciplinary actions. To students the new program is too strict. Student, Opal states,“That’s just too much.”







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